Discovery Draft..

By raquelcantu07

Discovery Draft plus progress report..ENJOY!

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2 Responses to “Discovery Draft..”

  1. Sara Says:

    Notes for Peer’s Oral Response

    Essay # 3

    Writer : Raquel Peer Respondent: Sara
    Instructions: Listen to the essay carefully. Take at least two minutes after the reading to complete the following notes, and then share your reactions orally with the writer. Submit the completed form to your teacher at the end of the Peer Response activity.

    (+) What works? (praise)

    Really good introduction
    Good description of the food
    Description of the service
    Talk about the prices

    (-) What Doesn’t (polish)

    Although it is informative it too personal

    (?) Questions?
    Is there anyway you can make the essay a little less personal and more to the point

  2. etfl0wnh0me Says:

    Notes for Peer’s Oral Response

    Essay # __3__

    Writer ________Natoya Ramkumar_____ Peer Respondent ______Raquel______

    Instructions: Listen to the essay carefully. Take at least two minutes after the reading to complete the following notes, and then share your reactions orally with the writer. Submit the completed form to your teacher at the end of the Peer Response activity.

    (+) What works? (praise)

    Nice introduction- gets my attention
    Nice comparisons to other sushi restaurants
    Includes different examples of there foods – tastes and presentation details
    Nice touch with including the reasonable prices

    (-) What Doesn’t (polish)

    A little to much personal detail.

    (?) Questions?

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