Now for whoever decides to read this post, I might add that I went to Torigo again this past weekend, and all I can say was YUMMM!
Now for whoever decides to read this post, I might add that I went to Torigo again this past weekend, and all I can say was YUMMM!
April 30, 2008 at 10:58 pm
Written Peer Response
Essay writer’s name: Raquel Peer’s name: Sara
Instructions: Respond to the asterisked items first. If you have time, respond to the rest in numerical order. Do not confer with the writer when answering the questions.
*1. What were your reactions when first reading this draft? List some of them here. I liked your essay, I thought that it was very descriptive and informative about the restaurant. I just think you need to take the word “I” out as much as possible.
2. Does the essay have a purpose beyond fulfilling the requirements of the assignment?
YES What do you see as that purpose? To let others know how good the restaurant is.
*3. Who would be interested in the profile provided in this essay? I am not a fish person, but I would recommend this place out now that I have read about it.
4. To what audience is the essay directed, and is this the appropriate audience for the subject? To whoever likes this type of food.
5. List two examples that show how this essay appeals to the needs of this audience. Refer to specific tone, word choice, details included, format, and so forth.
a. providing detail of the restaurant…food, service, etc.
b. the rave review
*6. What is the essay’s main point or thesis? Write the thesis sentence down here. That this is a good restaurant and people should want to go to it.
Is the thesis specific enough? YES
*7. Reread each paragraph, noting whether it is related to the thesis of the essay.
Par. 1 YES Par. 5 YES
Par. 2 YES Par. 6 YES
Par. 3 YES Par. 7 YES
Par. 4 YES Par. 8 YES
*8. Has the writer sufficiently covered of the topic, discussing the who, what, where, when, how, and why of the profile? Comment: I think that you really covered what is necessary for a restaurant review.
*9. Comment on the relevance and effectiveness of the information conveyed below.
a. Are the essay’s facts interesting? YES
Please note any facts you found uninteresting or off the subject:
b. Does the essay make clear why all the information is significant?
YES
c. Is the information understandable to you? YES
d. Is the language clear, with technical terms defined? YES
List terms that need to be defined here:
10. In which paragraphs would you like to see more information (facts and examples)?
I think that they were all informative.
*11. Comment on the handling of the sources of the profile.
a. What person or persons were interviewed? People who have gone to the restaurant
b. Explain what makes the person interviewed an appropriate source of information. They have eaten at the restaurant and liked it.
c. Are quotations, facts, and paraphrases attributed and documented clearly and correctly? The quotes from those who ate there seem to be pretty enthusiastic
12. Does the introduction
a. Get readers’ attention? YES
b. Present the thesis? YES
c. Introduce readers to the essay’s perspective? YES
d. Comments:
13. Does the conclusion
a. Remind you of what has been said? YES
b Provide something new to think about? YES
c. Round the essay off smoothly? YES
d. Comments: